These days, we are seeing an increasing amount of violence on television, and this is having a negative impact on children's behaviour. Do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, children are being exposed significantly to television programmes showing different forms of
violence
. I believe that it has damaging effects on their behaviour and mental health. By comparing with the past, children are no longer being isolated from various films containing acts of crime
such
as killing, abuse and other forms of
violence
. While there were limited opportunities for children to watch
such
scenes as the films had been broadcasted in the late evening hours and they didn’t have access to the internet, today’s modern technology provides them with a wide range of available films, series and videos displaying
violence
. As children learn from experience which are social learning and role modelling,
this
is to say that it can be more difficult for today’s children to decipher which acts are real and what to
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extend
.
In other words
, the likelihood that they can start connecting the scenes from films with regular situations and their solutions, is increasing within the time they spend by watching television. There are many consequences related to
this
trend.
Firstly
, children are more likely to behave and deal with their problems aggressively. As many psychological experts explain, the children’s exposition to violent scenes leads to long-term increases in risks of their desensitization processes that occur automatically in a human
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child's
child
mind. To conclude, undoubtedly the increase in available shows, films and a large amount of cartoons containing acts of
violence
affects children’s mental and social development.

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