Some people believe that violence on television and in computer games has a damaging effect on the society. Others deny that these factors have any significant influence on people's behaviour. What is your opinion?

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A part of the society believes that the violence experienced nowadays, has as one of the

responsible

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the tv and video game, while another part vehemently denies

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connection. In my opinion, it is not in the media that we should put the blame.

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with, I think that every person who is violent was born with that seed

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it. I truly believe that some people were born to be evil. Putting blame on television or violent video games is just an excuse for them. Take,

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, famous serial killers of the 60s and 70s, they did not grow up playing violent video games, they did not spend hours in front of a tv watching violent

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shows or films, because mainly, they only exist today.

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, if we take that information as a base, that people get more violent because of TV and games, I bet that practically the whole world would be violent nowadays, right? Well, at least a lot of the young people of the world! Imagine what chaos, we would be facing

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those days with all those crazy games? As for myself, I already have played a lot of those games and never thought to shoot or hit anyone out there. To conclude, yes, I even understand some people accuse the media of the cause of the violence but in fact, I think it is more useful in reducing it than increasing it. The media should be seen as a great tool to spread peace.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 6.0

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Grammatical Range: 6.0

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