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Over Sugar Consumption Is Unhealthy. Some People Think That Governments Should Take Responsibility To Control It

#sugar #consumption #people #governments #responsibility #control
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Excess
consumption
sugar
make
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makes
 people unhealthy. As compared with the past
,
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,
 the number of
diabetics
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diabetic
 patients
are increased
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is increasing
is increased
has increased
increases
 year after year.
That is
 because of the uncontrollable
usage
 of
sugar
 and added
sugar
 substances like soft drinks, candy etc. Some people are of the opinion is that
government
 should take responsibility to
control
 the
usage
 of
sugar
.
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.
 Proponents of these problem think that
,
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,
 individuals should take responsibility and they must
control
 themselves
for
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to
 maintain good health. With regards to the responsibility of
government
, there are numerous ways that
government
 can take initiative for the
control
 of
sugar
consumption
.
Firstly
,
government
 can check the quality of the
sugar
 and restrict or ban the production of low quality product that may positively affect our healthy habits.
Secondly
,
government
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the government
 should impose taxes for increasing the
price
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sugar price
sugar
.
As a result
,
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,
 the
usage
 of
sugar
 going to decline and that will again benefit to our body and our health. Another important way is that,
government
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the government
 can apply limit for the
consumption
 of
sugar
 with the
healp
give help or assistance; be of service
help
 of ration shops. Through
this
government
 can set a barrier or limit for the
consumption
. Correspondingly
,
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,
 individuals can themselves
control
 the
usage
 of
sugar
 for maintaining a good healthy habit.
For instance
, people who are aware about their daily healthy routine can
control
sugar
 level easily
.
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.
 Another important way to reduce the
consumption
 is that
,
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,
 people who are running fit
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