The amount of time spend on sport and exercise should be increased in school in order to tackle the problem of overweight children ? Do you think this the best way to deal the problem ? what other solutions can you suggest ?

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Obesity in lad's has become one of the major problems in current generations

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which leads to serious health issues

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significant amount

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The significant amount

Significant amount

of people think

this

can be resolved by spending ample amount of time for sports and exercise while others opine there are alternatives to

this

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To embark on

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the predominant factor that leads to increase of

weight

in adolescents is

lazyness

inactivity resulting from a dislike of work

laziness

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which is due to

rapid growth

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the rapid growth

of technology where people prefer to engage online

instead

of getting out of home and involving in some physical activities

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additionally

people prefer easy approach for all the things

for instance

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ordering food online

instead

of cooking at home

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This

approach does not move them from their seats,

consequently

abnormal increase

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an abnormal increase

in the

weight

at early ages

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On the other hand

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this

problem can be resolved by spending some time every day on physical activities

such

as games and Exercises which could bring a drastic change in one's health

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in addition

this

activities

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activity

for example

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jogging and cycling would be a better option for the lad's who prefer to workout outside the school

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In most of the educational institutions a specific slot would be allocated for recreational activities

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proper usage of these classes would bring a broader view in children on the health impacts of over

weight

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To conclude

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over

usually describes a large person who is fat but has a large frame to carry it

overweight

weight

is a problem that one has to take

serious

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seriously

at the early age

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which can be resolved by investing some amount of time on sports and daily exercises as prevention is better than cure

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each individual has to be serious in preventing the over

weight

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