The amount of time spend on sport and exercise should be increased in school in order to tackle the problem of overweight children ? Do you think this the best way to deal the problem ? what other solutions can you suggest ?

Obesity in lad's has become one of the major problems in current generations
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which leads to serious health issues
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significant amount
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The significant amount
Significant amount
of people think
this
can be resolved by spending ample amount of time for sports and exercise while others opine there are alternatives to
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To embark on
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the predominant factor that leads to increase of
weight
in adolescents is
lazyness
inactivity resulting from a dislike of work
laziness
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which is due to
rapid growth
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the rapid growth
of technology where people prefer to engage online
instead
of getting out of home and involving in some physical activities
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additionally
people prefer easy approach for all the things
for instance
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ordering food online
instead
of cooking at home
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This
approach does not move them from their seats,
consequently
abnormal increase
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an abnormal increase
in the
weight
at early ages
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On the other hand
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this
problem can be resolved by spending some time every day on physical activities
such
as games and Exercises which could bring a drastic change in one's health
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in addition
to
this
activities
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activity
for example
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jogging and cycling would be a better option for the lad's who prefer to workout outside the school
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In most of the educational institutions a specific slot would be allocated for recreational activities
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proper usage of these classes would bring a broader view in children on the health impacts of over
weight
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To conclude
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over
usually describes a large person who is fat but has a large frame to carry it
overweight
weight
is a problem that one has to take
serious
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seriously
at the early age
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which can be resolved by investing some amount of time on sports and daily exercises as prevention is better than cure
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each individual has to be serious in preventing the over
weight
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