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In many countries today there are many highly qualified graduates without employment. What factors may have caused this situation and what, in your opinion, can/should be done about it?

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The unemployed scholar’s rate is increasing in several countries due to the unavailability of
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 vacancies. I do believe that the government has an authority to tackle
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 problem with expanding the
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 and types of vacant
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 position. On the one hand, the
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 of graduates of is unbalanced with the
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 of vacant jobs which are opened by the corporation.
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, Indonesia manages to have more than 300,000 bachelors in every year, and
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number
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 seems to grow year by year, but it might just around 10-20%
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of
 the total that hit the
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 directly, leaving the rest as the jobless. If
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 situation continued in the future,
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 the
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 of unemployment would rise rapidly and might cause an economic-decline movement. Because the inhabitant cannot earn the money for their own living, and it might cause a crisis later.
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, I think that the stakeholder is playing a core role here. In order to expand the
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 of needed
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employees
, the
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government
 can do the open recruitments, especially in state-owned enterprises. With the big total
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 of state-owned enterprises (BUMN), the demand for employment will be rose and it can be a chance for every fresh graduate to fill the vacant
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. Precisely,
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 movement can be a win-win solution for the government and the scholar. To reiterate, the small
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 of applicable
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 that offered is the reason for the jobless happening, and with the decision by
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the government
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widening
 the vacant position in state-owned enterprises can solve
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 situation.
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