In countries where there is high unemployment, most pupils should be offered only primary education. There is no point in offering secondary education to those who will have no hope of finding a job. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

There is a
controlversial
marked by or capable of arousing controversy
controversial
controversy
debate that pupils should be offered only primary
education
if their
country
has
high
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a high unemployment rate
unemployment
rate
and it is not
neccesary
absolutely essential
necessary
to offer secondary
education
because the chance of finding a
job
is
little
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less
. I strongly
belive
accept as true; take to be true
believe
believed
this
statement has many flaws
such
as
undefined correlation
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undefined correlations
between
education
and
unemployment
.
Accept space
.
Hence
, I do not agree with it.
First
of all, we need to understand the reasons behind
high
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the high unemployment rate
unemployment
rate
. In many cases, the high
unemployment
rate
is due to the economic situation
such
as high inflation or ability of government to run the
economy
. Those economics indicators represent the health of the
country
and likely correlated with
job
market
. Barring pupils from secondary
education
does not contribute to the progression of
economy but
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the economy, but
the economy but
also
cuts its potential growth
rate
.
For instance
, secondary educated pupils should be able to adapt to working environment better than the primary one.
Furthermore
, people with minimum
education
may seek for jobs oversea at developed
country
where there is always a need of
immigrant
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immigrant labour workers
immigrant labour worker
the immigrant labour worker
labor
worker. Singapore is a good example where there a lot of low educated people working
in
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on
construction sites and maids working
at
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in
households. Those oversea jobs are great sources of foreign currency
to
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in
the home
country
.
Moreover
, the idea of people has no chance finding a
job
even he or she got secondary
education
contains a major flaw.
Job
market
is defined by demand and supply of skilled and qualified
labor
a social class comprising those who do manual labor or work for wages
labour
and the size of
job
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the job market
a job market
market
is driven by
economy
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the economy
and development, obviously people with higher
education
is preferred, even that
job
requires no
education
at all and even the size of
job
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the job market
a job market
market
is small, there will always be need of
labor
a social class comprising those who do manual labor or work for wages
labour
for any industry.
For example
, demand of
labor
a social class comprising those who do manual labor or work for wages
labour
is
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has been
always present at low development
country
or rural area.
This
idea is not only solving the
economy
issue but
Accept comma addition
issue, but
also
represent the weakness in
coutry
(United Kingdom) a region created by territorial division for the purpose of local government
county
city
government. To conclude, high
unemployment
rate
is an issue of any
economy
and providing pupils with only primary
eduation
the activities of educating or instructing; activities that impart knowledge or skill
education
is not the solution to that problem and doing so may limit the
country
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country's
potential growth
rate
in future.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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