Some people believe that studying at university or college is the best route to a successful career, while others believe that it is better to get a job straight after school. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

When they finish
an educational institution
school
shool
, teenagers face the dilemma of whether to get a job or continue their education. While there are some benefits to getting a job straight after school,
refers to the speaker or writer
I
i
would argue that it is better to go to college or university. The option to start work straight after school is attractive for several reasons.
Firstly
, teenagers, who start earning money
earlier in time; previously
earlier
ealier
than
any of various alternatives; some other
another
other
, may have greater opportunities in
obtain
gaining
joining
gainning
working experiences and
also
become more independent in their finance.
Consequently
,
such
an advantage, beneficial in expanding working experiences, provides myriad
a possibility due to a favorable combination of circumstances
opportunities
opportunites
in getting promotions and
therefore
helps those teenagers can settle down earlier.
Secondly
, earning money earlier
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may help
may helps
premature people closer in achieving
of them or themselves
their
there
goals. To be specific, luxurious goods
such
as expensive cars or enormous houses, which are dream items
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for
to
youngsters, can motivate them to make
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a more lucrative income
more lucrative income
.
On the other hand
,
refers to the speaker or writer
I
i
believe that it is more beneficial for
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students
the student
a student
student
to continue their studies. Some jobs, which require academic qualifications or even higher certifications, are not suitable for teenagers who skipped their education progress.
Besides
the better
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job
jobs
opportunities that those degrees bring to
receive an academic degree upon completion of one's studies
graduates
graduators
, higher salaries and greater incentives would be provided
also
. On top of that,
receive an academic degree upon completion of one's studies
graduates
graduators
can have chances to broaden their knowledge in distinct fields and
therefore
become a useful member of society. For the reasons mentioned above, it seems to me that
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the student
student
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is
are
more likely to be successful in their lives if they continue their studies beyond school level.

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