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In order to restrict ever increasing crime rate a class of people ponder that their has to be predefined punishment based on nature of crime whereas other opine that circumstances of crime should be taken into account while deciding the punishment .Both views are discussed below before reaching to valid conclusion .

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Fixing the
punishment
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 by looking just at type of
crime
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 makes the decision making process very quick. As without wasting much time on investigating the
situation
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 of
crime
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 it is actually the type of
crime
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 which decides
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punishment
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the punishment
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,
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by regularizing
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punishment fear
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punishment, fear
 of
law
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the law
 is inculcated among all categories of criminals
that is
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 small or brutal ones.
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 Saudi Arab follows the policy of fixed sentencing. The law of country punishes the culprit of stealing an apple same as
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 stealing a car
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As a result
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 of
this
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 Saudi Arab always tops the list of countries with low
crime
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 rate
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 In admittedly
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 the
situation
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 in which a
crime
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 is committed plays a crucial role in judging the mindset of person committing
crime
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Thus
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 judgment made after taking into consideration the circumstances often believe to be
fair
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a fair one
one
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contrary
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Contrary
 to mandatory
punishment
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 the idea of flexible
punishment
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 help preventing the
situation
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 triggered culprits from facing a furious
punishment
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. Above all
,
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it is not judicial of imposing
same
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the same punishment
punishment
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 to juvenile culprit as to
adult
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an adult
one
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 In my opinion
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flexible sentencing is more humane and righteous
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the circumstances while a felony occurs regulates the occurrence of
crime
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 the sentencing should never be based on type of
crime
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 To conclude
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although
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 all criminals are to be treated equal in the eye of
law even
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law, even
 though the judgment process should be active
one
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situation regulating intensity
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the situation regulating intensity
a situation regulating intensity
 of
punishment
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) rather
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then
conjunction used in comparatives
than
 passive
one
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 (with
prefixed set
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a prefixed set
 of rules deciding
punishment
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