IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 4.5

Many people believe that education and high qualifications will bring success. Others think that it’s not required to achieve success in life. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #education #qualifications #success #it’s #life
In
this
 speedily growing world, there is a different opinion on the achieved
success
. The number of folks who say that the
education
, as well as deeply qualification, are both important for the gaining
success
, while others society
say
Suggestion
says
 that it is not important to get
success
. I
discuss
Suggestion
have discussed
 both sides before reaching my opinion, in
ensuing paragraphs
Suggestion
the ensuing paragraphs
. There is a plenty reason of why community
believe
Suggestion
believes
 that the intelligent person can get more
success
 in early
life
, one can go to the list.
First
 of all, nowadays,
education
 is one type of key for solving the most of
problem
Suggestion
the problem
 and achieved a good result.
In other words
, if humans are educated, that’s why they can ameliorate any difficult issue in their
life
, and they can get great
success
.
For example
, the recent survey from the United States, the researcher says that in around the world, the most of successful person got easily
success
 in their
life
 from their better
education
 as well as their advance qualification.
Thus
, the study is most important for all
kind
Suggestion
kinds
 of community. On the other hands, some people say that without any type of
education
, humans got
success
. If people are interested in playing
sport
Suggestion
sports
 and they like to get
success
 in
this
filed
catch or pick up (balls) in baseball or cricket
field
, that time
education
 is invaluable.
For example
, the world faster runner who name is
usain
Suggestion
Usain
 bolt, he was studded only 4 standards, but
this
 day all
kind
Suggestion
kinds
 know him. Agglomerating, all the points elaborated above, it can be concluded that without any type of
success
, the people live on earth is not important in the early day. In my opinion, an intelligent person plays a crucial role in getting a
success
; it is most important in all human
life
.
Submitted by meet on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: