Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmers( for example working for a charity, improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children)

Being a part of
NGO
Suggestion
the NGO
an NGO
, making good connections with the neighbours or provide sports education to
youngesters
a young person of either sex
youngsters
youngster
should be mandatory according to
few people
Suggestion
a few people
. In my opinion, it will be
trimendous act
Suggestion
a tremendous act
tremendous act
for the development of student
spritually
in a spiritual manner
spiritually
and intelligently, that will have
positive effect
Suggestion
a positive effect
on a country as a whole.
Firstly
, students will be more sensitive rather kind towards
helpong
an individual quantity of food or drink taken as part of a meal
helping
people around them, which is lagging somewhere nowadays, by getting
involed
connected by participation or association or use
involved
in it.
For
example by
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example, by
paying visit to
orphanage
Suggestion
the orphanage
or
oldage
Suggestion
old age
homes, which nowadays getting increased in number as children do not have enough time for their parents. It
make
Suggestion
makes
them feel satisfied by spending enough time or bringing some gifts for them. Not only
humans
Accept comma addition
humans, then
then
also
care about animals
also
.
Secondly
,
younsters
a young person of either sex
youngsters
are having more interaction with neighbours,
relatives etc
Accept comma addition
relatives, etc.
relatives etc.
,
that is
quite invisible in students maybe because of social media or games. They pay more visit
inorder
Suggestion
in order
to help them in various household things or to talk with them and going with their parents to meet relatives.
Finally
, it can encourage young blood to provide free education
tp
in the direction of
to
younger generation
Suggestion
a younger generation
the younger generation
younger generations
of any caste or creed
(
Accept space
(
poor, rich or orphans) by sharing information about the subject like sports, arts, history etc.
For instance
, they can go to any stadium to teach any particular sports in which he is
expert
Suggestion
an expert
. In conclusion, any country having these gems will automatically prosper
amd
in order to; used instead of "to", especially after try, come, go
and
this
type of education can be better given in school only.
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