Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmers( for example working for a charity, improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children)

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Being a part of

NGO

Suggestion

the NGO

an NGO

, making good connections with the neighbours or provide sports education to

youngesters

a young person of either sex

youngsters

youngster

should be mandatory according to

few people

Suggestion

a few people

. In my opinion, it will be

trimendous act

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a tremendous act

tremendous act

for the development of student

spritually

in a spiritual manner

spiritually

and intelligently, that will have

positive effect

Suggestion

a positive effect

on a country as a whole.

Firstly

, students will be more sensitive rather kind towards

helpong

an individual quantity of food or drink taken as part of a meal

helping

people around them, which is lagging somewhere nowadays, by getting

involed

connected by participation or association or use

involved

in it.

For

example by

Accept comma addition

example, by

paying visit to

orphanage

Suggestion

the orphanage

oldage

Suggestion

old age

homes, which nowadays getting increased in number as children do not have enough time for their parents. It

make

Suggestion

makes

them feel satisfied by spending enough time or bringing some gifts for them. Not only

humans

Accept comma addition

humans, then

then

also

care about animals

also

Secondly

younsters

a young person of either sex

youngsters

are having more interaction with neighbours,

relatives etc

Accept comma addition

relatives, etc.

relatives etc.

that is

quite invisible in students maybe because of social media or games. They pay more visit

inorder

Suggestion

in order

to help them in various household things or to talk with them and going with their parents to meet relatives.

Finally

, it can encourage young blood to provide free education

in the direction of

younger generation

Suggestion

a younger generation

the younger generation

younger generations

of any caste or creed

(

Accept space

(

poor, rich or orphans) by sharing information about the subject like sports, arts, history etc.

For instance

, they can go to any stadium to teach any particular sports in which he is

expert

Suggestion

an expert

. In conclusion, any country having these gems will automatically prosper

amd

in order to; used instead of "to", especially after try, come, go

and

this

type of education can be better given in school only.

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Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmers( for example working for a charity, improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children)

Fully explain your ideas

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These days the majority of employers require good social skills. While these social skills could improve employee management and bring effective networking, these could social skills could not determine exact qualification and abilities.