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The chart below shows the percentage of male and female teachers in six different types of educational setting in the UK in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentage of male and female teachers in six different types of educational setting in the UK in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the
proportional
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 of instructors in
United
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 Kingdom of
Nursery
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Nurseries
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, primary
school
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schools
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,
college
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colleges
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, Private
institute
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institutes
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 and universities in 2010.
Overall
, the percentage of women
teacher
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teachers
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 in
nursery
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the nursery
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, primary
school
 and secondary
school
 were higher than
men
whereas
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the men
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men
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men's
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 percentage recorded maximum in private training institute and university.
Furthermore
, the most significant
different
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 was in
Nursery
 and Primary
school
 between
man
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men
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 and women.
To begin
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 the rate of
men
 tutor in
nursery
 primary
school
and
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were under 10%
while
 the rate of
female
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the female
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 teacher
were
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was
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 almost 95% and 90% respectively. In secondary
school
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,school
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 we noticed that the
men
 instructors suddenly increased to around 44% than those of female
teacher
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teachers
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 who measured
as
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48%.
Secondly
 in private training
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institutes
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institute
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 the number of teachers of male recorded higher which measured as 48%
while
female
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the female
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 tutor percentage end up with 44%
that
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which
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 is completely opposite to secondary
school
. Surprisingly, there is no difference found in college so both ended at almost 45%.
Finally
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 in
university
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,university
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 the majority
teachers
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of teachers
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 were male
who
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apply
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measured
70
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at 70
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%
that
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which
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is
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as
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 opposed to women at 30%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "that is, while".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words nursery, school, men with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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