The chart below shows the percentage of male and female teachers in six different types of educational setting in the UK in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the
proportional
of instructors in Replace the word
proportion
United
Kingdom of Correct article usage
the United
Nursery
, primary Fix the agreement mistake
Nurseries
school
, Fix the agreement mistake
schools
college
, Private Fix the agreement mistake
colleges
institute
and universities in 2010.
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institutes
Overall
, the percentage of women teacher
in Fix the agreement mistake
teachers
nursery
, primary Add an article
the nursery
a nursery
school
and secondary school
were higher than men
whereas
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the men
men
percentage recorded maximum in private training institute and university. Change noun form
men's
Furthermore
, the most significant different
was in Replace the word
difference
Nursery
and Primary school
between man
and women.
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men
To begin
with, first of all
the rate of Add the comma(s)
,all
men
tutor in nursery
primary school
and
were under 10% Correct word choice
apply
while
the rate of female
teacher Add an article
the female
a female
were
almost 95% and 90% respectively. In secondary Change the verb form
was
school
we noticed that the Add a comma
,school
men
instructors suddenly increased to around 44% than those of female teacher
who measured Fix the agreement mistake
teachers
as
48%.
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apply
Secondly
in private training Fix the agreement mistake
institutes
institute
the number of teachers of male recorded higher which measured as 48% Add a comma
,institute
while
female
tutor percentage end up with 44% Correct article usage
the female
that
is completely opposite to secondary Correct pronoun usage
which
school
. Surprisingly, there is no difference found in college so both ended at almost 45%. Finally
in Add a comma
,Finally
university
the majority Add a comma
,university
teachers
were male Change preposition
of teachers
who
measured Correct pronoun usage
apply
70
% Change preposition
at 70
that
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which
is
opposed to women at 30%.Correct your spelling
as
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Vocabulary: Replace the words nursery, school, men with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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