The chart below shows the percentage of male and female teachers in six different types of educational setting in the UK in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentage of male and female teachers in six different types of educational setting in the UK in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The chart below shows the percentage of male and female teachers in six different types of educational setting in the UK in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
The bar chart illustrates the
proportional
Replace the word
proportion
show examples
of instructors in
United
Correct article usage
the United
show examples
Kingdom of
Use synonyms
Nursery
Fix the agreement mistake
Nurseries
show examples
, primary
Use synonyms
school
Fix the agreement mistake
schools
show examples
,
college
Fix the agreement mistake
colleges
show examples
, Private
institute
Fix the agreement mistake
institutes
show examples
and universities in 2010.
Overall
Linking Words
, the percentage of women
teacher
Fix the agreement mistake
teachers
show examples
in
Use synonyms
nursery
Add an article
the nursery
a nursery
show examples
, primary
school
Use synonyms
and secondary
school
Use synonyms
were higher than
men
Use synonyms
whereas
Linking Words
Use synonyms
Correct article usage
the men
show examples
men
Change noun form
men's
show examples
percentage recorded maximum in private training institute and university.
Furthermore
Linking Words
, the most significant
different
Replace the word
difference
show examples
was in
Nursery
Use synonyms
and Primary
school
Use synonyms
between
man
Fix the agreement mistake
men
show examples
and women.
To begin
Linking Words
with, first of
all
Add the comma(s)
,all
show examples
the rate of
men
Use synonyms
tutor in
nursery
Use synonyms
primary
school
Use synonyms
and
Correct word choice
apply
show examples
were under 10%
while
Linking Words
the rate of
female
Add an article
the female
a female
show examples
teacher
were
Change the verb form
was
show examples
almost 95% and 90% respectively. In secondary
Use synonyms
school
Add a comma
,school
show examples
we noticed that the
men
Use synonyms
instructors suddenly increased to around 44% than those of female
teacher
Fix the agreement mistake
teachers
show examples
who measured
as
Change preposition
apply
show examples
48%.
Secondly
Linking Words
in private training
Fix the agreement mistake
institutes
show examples
institute
Add a comma
,institute
show examples
the number of teachers of male recorded higher which measured as 48%
while
Linking Words
female
Correct article usage
the female
show examples
tutor percentage end up with 44%
Linking Words
that
Correct pronoun usage
which
show examples
is completely opposite to secondary
school
Use synonyms
. Surprisingly, there is no difference found in college so both ended at almost 45%.
Linking Words
Finally
Add a comma
,Finally
show examples
in
university
Add a comma
,university
show examples
the majority
teachers
Change preposition
of teachers
show examples
were male
who
Correct pronoun usage
apply
show examples
measured
70
Change preposition
at 70
show examples
%
Linking Words
that
Correct pronoun usage
which
show examples
is
Correct your spelling
as
show examples
opposed to women at 30%.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "that is, while".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words nursery, school, men with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender distribution
  • educational setting
  • primary education
  • secondary education
  • nursery school
  • higher education
  • proportion
  • outnumber
  • trend
  • comparison
  • historical factors
  • social influence
  • teaching profession
  • data interpretation
  • balance
What to do next:
Look at other essays: