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Many people expect that the proportion of old people will be more than the young people in the future. Do you think it is positive or negative development?

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It is anticipated that in the future, the rate of retired people will be more than
the young
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younger
 people.
while
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While
 many people think it will have positive effects,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 claim that
this
 development will have negative influences on the society.
Firstly
, the reason why
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 think to have more the old in country can affect adversely to the society is due to low physical strength and mental problems. If having old
employee
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employed
 in
work places
a place where work is done
workplaces
 can cause the decreasing of the quality of outcome.
For instance
, while young workers can do some projects for a week, the old do the same work for two weeks.
Thus
, it may cause several issues in
company
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the company
,
Accept space
,
and in the country the level of work quality will decrease. As we live in
technological era
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a technological era
the technological era
, everyone should use new technological gadgets, and everywhere is constructed on the base of computers and robots. As the old cannot utilize all of them and, it leads to being behind
of
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in
 development.
Furthermore
,
Accept space
,
having more old teachers can
also
 influence education.
while
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While
 they teach students with traditional methods, students will not improve knowledge and horizon in their modernized era. To conclude, to have
more old
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older
 people
is
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be
 more likely to have benefits, but
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 strongly claim that it will have negative effects on society in the future.
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