Eating too much sugar is harmful for health. Some people think that it is government responsibility to limit people’s sugar consumption, while others think that it is individuals responsibility to limit the amount of sugar they eat. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

It is true that consuming processed food more than a limit will jeopardize health, and
same stands
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the same stands
for
sugar
aswell
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as well
.
However
, while some believe that the
gvernment
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
is
resposible
worthy of or requiring responsibility or trust; or held accountable
responsible
for limit the
excessed
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excess
excesses
sugar
consumption, I would
argee
be in accord; be in agreement
agree
argue
with those who argue that it is
individual’s duty
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the individual’s duty
to take care of their food-intake.
To begin
with, public
healthare
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health is
health are
department
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a department
the department
which falls under
government
has the prime
resposibility
the social force that binds you to the courses of action demanded by that force
responsibility
of public well being. But, due to lack of
stong
having strength or power greater than average or expected
strong
seating
policy on sugary products,
sugar
prone
(microbiology) an infectious protein particle similar to a virus but lacking nucleic acid; thought to be the agent responsible for scrapie and other degenerative diseases of the nervous system
prion
disease
are speading
Suggestion
is spreading
are spreading
like an epidemic.
Thus
, it is
government
’s duty to enact a law, which cut down the consumption of harmful sweet products.
For example
, Canada has implemented a rule which taxes sugary product based on the total content of
sugar
they have.
As a result
, it helped
Canadian
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the Canadian government
government
to minimize the
meance
how a result is obtained or an end is achieved
means
menace
of dangerous illness.
However
, I feel that the individual has
major role
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a major role
to play while dealing with
such
kind of scenario.
This
is because the
government
only make
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only makes
policy for our well being but individual’s action is more effective in
this
case. The reason for
this
is, when a person
understand
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understands
consequences
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the consequences
of his eating habit and restrain harmful eatable from their meals,
than
subsequently or soon afterward (often used as sentence connectors)
then
the risk of lethal disease automatically falls.
Moreover
, in the liberal market, the
government
can not
can not
cannot
limit sell of these products after some extent.
Therefore
, result oriented solution lies with
inviduals
a human being
individuals
only. In conclusion,
although
the
government
can make strict law related to sell of high
sugar
products, I think that the individual’s action originated form
awarness
having knowledge of
awareness
can take on
this
problem effectively.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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