While, some people think playing video games is waste of time and it can adverse effect on the health of players.I am completely disagree with this statement. I will discuss their merits in the following paragraphs.

To begin
with, there are
myraid
too numerous to be counted
myriad
reasons why
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
believe that playing
video
games is worthwhile. The
first
and the foremost thing is, if they play
video
games
then
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than
their mind feels refreshing as well as, they will learn new strategies.
Moreover
, their families will spend more time with them while playing
video
games.
In other words
, they improve their social skills
also
.
Furthermore
, if they play
video
games, they will boost their attention and concentration power.
Additionally
, they can enhance their memory while playing
video
games.
In addition
to, if they play
video
games
then
they
would be raise
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would raise
would be raised
their multitasking skills.
Besides
, it is a great source of learning. They can upgrade their problem- solving skills as well.
Further
, when they
playing
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play
are playing
video
games
,
Accept space
,
they feel energetic.
However
, if they play
video
games, their coordination power increases.
Last
but not the least they improve their brain's speed too. To sum up, in my opinion, playing
video
games is very useful for players. As
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
already discussed above that they can feel
energize
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energized
as well as they can improve their concentration power.
On the other hand
, they spend more times with their families. While, playing
video
games
,
Accept space
,
they can enhance their memory. It is
great source
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a great source
of learning.
they
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They
feel
refresh
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refreshed
while playing
video
games.
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