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Many people are choosing to find information on line rather than in books. Is this development positive or negative ?

#people #information #line #books #development
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Nowadays,
internet
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the internet
 has
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gain
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gained
 a lot of attention in terms of searching for
information
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 by most of them
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 of books. As there are plenty of resources to
gain
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information
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 through
browser
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a browser
.
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, online
information
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 sometime is not that legitimate. But, books are genuine. One must respect books, as
author
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the author
 puts his whole life experience. I think it is a positive
move but
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move, but
 at the same
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time it
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time, it
 completely depends upon the kind of
information
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looking
tell anonymously
leaking
. It is very comfortable to look for something to
gain
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 knowledge and
also
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 from various sources. Online
information
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 gets updated
in
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at
 regular interval, it does not take much
time
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 to look for the
information
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 which we are looking for and it is
fascination
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fascinating
 to know the reaction of a other members, as it is a global platform.
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 as we you are reading a blog which it get updated on a regular basis, at the same
time
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 we
also
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 get to know the feedback of other reader around the world.
However
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, there is no guarantee that all
information
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 on the internet is true, you can get into trouble by reading wrong. But, Books are a complete life experience of an author.
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 as, if you are following a technical blog, which consist of latest gadget
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information but
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information, but
 there are hidden truth which blogger
don’t know
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doesn’t know
 as blogger didn’t
used
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use
 that gadget completely. So there is a small fear of
gain
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 false
information
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. To conclude, though it is a positive move to get
information
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form
a giver or sender
from
 various
source
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sources
 on the
internet but
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internet, but
 at the same
time
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 we cannot completely trust
such
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information
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, I believe.

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