Film stars and music celebrities may earn a great deal of money and live in luxurious surroundings, but many of them lead unhappy lives. Do you agree? To what extent is this the price they pay for being famous?
Famous people as supermodels and movie stars nowadays or in the past, they used to receive so much money
comparing
with other people who are assumed to do more important jobs as doctors or engineers. Suggestion
compared
Moreover
, they live a luxury lifestyle by just work for two or three month
in the year.
Suggestion
months
However
, due to the luxury and the empty life some
of them get depressed.Accept comma addition
life, some
furthermore
, some of them commit suicide in addition
Furthermore
such
as Marilyn Monroe. She was a super star
when she someone who is dazzlingly skilled in any field
superstar
decide
to end her life.In fact, many of them think because they have everythingSuggestion
decides
,
so nothing seems interesting anymore.Accept space
,
For example
, in the past the used to enjoy their birthday party. Espeically
gifts, but now they can just buy what they wantSuggestion
Especially
.
Accept space
.
On the other hand
, being a famous person mean
that you have to be so careful in the way you talk, clothes, even the way you eat.Suggestion
was a famous person meant
is a famous person meant
has a famous person meant
being a famous person mean
Aswell
, you have to be nice with people who always asks for photos Suggestion
As well
with out
considering your feeling.in absence of
without
Besides
, sometime they just takes
pictures without any permission. Suggestion
just take
are just taking
despite
thatSuggestion
Despite
,
public believe Accept space
,
that is
part of being a celebrity and I partly agree with that but. Also
, I believe that even Celebries
need some privacy.
In conclusion, being Celebrity it dose not mean that a widely known person
celebrities
every thing
is allowed, as a famous person and a role model they need to behave well.all things
everything
In addition
, we still have to thinke
that all these celebrities are judge or regard; look upon; judge
think
huomns
and some time they make mistakes.all of the living human inhabitants of the earth
humans
also
, we have to respect their personal space.Suggestion
Also
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