Film stars and music celebrities may earn a great deal of money and live in luxurious surroundings, but many of them lead unhappy lives. Do you agree? To what extent is this the price they pay for being famous?

Famous people as supermodels and movie stars nowadays or in the past, they used to receive so much money
comparing
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compared
with other people who are assumed to do more important jobs as doctors or engineers.
Moreover
, they live a luxury lifestyle by just work for two or three
month
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months
in the year.
However
, due to the luxury and the empty
life some
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life, some
of them get depressed.
furthermore
in addition
Furthermore
, some of them commit suicide
such
as Marilyn Monroe. She was a
super star
someone who is dazzlingly skilled in any field
superstar
when she
decide
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decides
to end her life.In fact, many of them think because they have everything
,
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,
so nothing seems interesting anymore.
For example
, in the past the used to enjoy their birthday party.
Espeically
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Especially
gifts, but now they can just buy what they want
.
Accept space
.
On the other hand
,
being a famous person mean
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was a famous person meant
is a famous person meant
has a famous person meant
being a famous person mean
that you have to be so careful in the way you talk, clothes, even the way you eat.
Aswell
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As well
, you have to be nice with people who always asks for photos
with out
in absence of
without
considering your feeling.
Besides
, sometime they
just takes
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just take
are just taking
pictures without any permission.
despite
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Despite
that
,
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,
public believe
that is
part of being a celebrity and I partly agree with that but.
Also
, I believe that even
Celebries
a widely known person
celebrities
need some privacy. In conclusion, being Celebrity it dose not mean that
every thing
all things
everything
is allowed, as a famous person and a role model they need to behave well.
In addition
, we still have to
thinke
judge or regard; look upon; judge
think
that all these celebrities are
huomns
all of the living human inhabitants of the earth
humans
and some time they make mistakes.
also
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Also
, we have to respect their personal space.

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