The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
The chart compares the
propotions
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proportions
proportion
of Australian
men
and
women
doing regular physical
activity
in 2010. There were six
of
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age
groups which were
divide
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by
the
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age
range
. First of all, it was
cleared
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that the
percentage
of
male
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males
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doing physical
activity
in the
age
range
of 15 to 24 reached its
percentage
, at 52.8% which was higher than
female's
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the female's
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percentage
by 5%. On the one hand, there was a significant drop rate of
men
in the
age
range
of 25 to 34 by 10%.
On the other hand
, with the same
age
group
, the
percentage
of
women
rose slightly
around
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2%.
Secondly
, there was a tendency
rising
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of
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women
's
percentage
in the
age
range
between 25 to 64. It was important to note that, the
percentage
of
women
's doing physical
activity
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rose
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dramatically from 48.9% in
age
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the age
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group
of 25 to 34 to 53% in the
age
group
of 55 to 64.
Nonetheless
, the
men
's rate kept its
steadily
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around 44%. In the
age
group
of 65 and over, the
percentage
of
women
and
men
kept the same
percentage
. In general, the
bart
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bar
chart depicted the
percentage
of
men
and
women
doing regular physical
activity
in 2010.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words men, women, activity, age, range, percentage, group with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 9 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Physical activity
  • Regular exercise
  • Age demographics
  • Participation rate
  • Trend analysis
  • Gender disparity
  • Health initiatives
  • Public health policies
  • Statistical comparison
  • Lifestyle choices
  • Work commitments
  • Age-related factors
  • Preventative health
  • Exercise habits
  • Surveillance data
  • Motivators and barriers
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