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Some people think it is better for children to grown up in the city, while others think that life in the countryside is more suitable for them. What are the advantages and disadvantages of both places?

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Living in the rural area is thought as the best option for children by a group of people, while others believe that cities
offer
 more opportunities. In my opinion, if the
city
 offers security and green areas, I agree it is a better place to raise the
next
 generation enjoying some advantages from both sides.
Firstly
, the countryside
let
Suggestion
lets
 children be in touch with nature, taking care of animals and helping with the gardening. Because of that, they learn how to protect the environment and to live without any technological equipment.
Besides
 that, they have more freedom to play outside the house without any security worries, whereas in the
city
 they are kept at home using smartphones and computers for
this
 reason.
On the other hand
, schools usually have lower quality and it is hard to find extracurricular classes.
Therefore
, children have difficulties trying to develop their abilities
besides
 the school curriculum.
However
, schools
at
Suggestion
in
 metropolitan areas tend to have better quality and
offer
 all kinds of activities. Even if there is a sport or an art course that the institution does not
offer
, it is possible to look for it in another place around the
city
.
As a result
, all children’s talents and passions can be easier to develop.
On the other hand
, security, pollution and low contact with nature are issues that we have to worry about. The better option would be a
city
 with an excellent quality of life where children could play in parks and gardens. To sum up, growing up in the countryside can be very positive for someone’s childhood, but the
city
 will usually
offer
 better opportunities for their talents’ development.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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