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Topic: Tourism is always a force for good which enables people of different countries to understand each other .Do you agree or disgreee ?You should give reasons fro your answer and include ideas and examples from your own knowledge and experience .

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Tourism is generally considered to be favourable in promoting mutual understanding among natives of distinct countries. I am in favour of the argument that tourisms cordial relations among peoples of different countries by overcoming different barriers
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My inclination is justified in
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the ensuing paragraphs
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 the strongest one to prove my view is that tourism helps breaking cultural and traditional barriers
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By visiting other
counties
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county
 people not only learn about traditional
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believes, but
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 discover common link behind the histories of native and travelling country
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To illustrate
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 by travelling to Sri Lanka
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an Indian learning about the historical linkage of both countries
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 develops
feeling
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a feeling
the feeling
feelings
 of belonging
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to
otherwise distinct country
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an otherwise distinct country
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 Sri Lanka
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Thus
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tourism helps developing
feeling
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a feeling
the feeling
 of harmony among peoples
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 Scrutinizing
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 while travelling people learns about varied food habits and language of another country
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Language and food are considered to be as universal forces connecting mankind together
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as eating together with people of
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various
varying
 countries
helps
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help
 understanding their life style and
further
 strengthening cordial relations
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Thus
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 In conclusion
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I firmly agree that overseas travel enhances man to man relationships
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furthermore it
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furthermore, it
 bridges the gap between traditional
believes
any cognitive content held as true
beliefs
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 lingual and dietary dissimilarities
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