Art is considered an essential part of all cultures throughout the world. However, these days fewer and fewer people appreciate art and turn their focus to science, technology and business. Why do you think that is? What could be done to encourage more people to take interest in the arts?

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There are a number of arguable global issues we have to deal with or we are facing.

However

, it has been a really long time since I saw or heard those who talked about

art

, which can mean, nowadays,

people barely are

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people are barely

interested in

art

and turn their focus away from it. It is understandable why people do not much care about

art

. It is mainly because we have many other issues we take care of and there are loads of entertainment we can enjoy (

For example

, music, TV show, computer games and socialising with our friends).

Nevertheless

, It is crucial keeping our interests in

art

, in order to cherish it.

This

essay will be

further

discussed

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this

issue, based on my thoughts.

To begin

with,

art

represents our history and culture. In fact, many youth and foreigners learn our history and culture through exploring our artwork or sculpture at a museum or

art

gallery. Not only that, there is no doubt that all styles of our architecture are based on our traditional

art

. We have to remember that thanks to traditional our own

art

, we can live in an artistic and spectacular building and interior.

Secondly

art

is a quite important role of income for

government

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governments

the government

all over the world. To take tourism an example, Artists have immense power to attract tourists who are one of the major revenue for the country. It is noticeable how much the French government

earn

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earns

money from tourists who fancy the artwork and architecture in France. To sum up, we need to be more grateful for our

art

and artist rather than pursuing new entertainment or our business. Government should be required to promote their own

art

and make a constant investment in preserving and developing it.

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