Present a written argument or case to an educated reader with no specialist knowledge of the following topic: In many countries, children are engaged in some kind of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong, while others consider it as valuable work experience, important for learning and taking responsibility. What are your opinions on this issue?

During the
last
football world cup there was an allegation made by the International Human Rights Organization, that the football manufacturers in Pakistan had employed underage minors as child
laborers
someone who works with their hands; someone engaged in manual labor
labourers
. Due to the backlash from the media organizations the companies had released a statement including three points justifying their action.
Firstly
, the parent’s consent was taken prior to the hiring of underage employees.
Secondly
, they were hired during the summer vacation days.
Finally
, the time which they had spent was valuable since they had gained valuable trade skills. I almost entirely disagree with the statements of the manufacturing companies. Recent statistics published by the
labor
a social class comprising those who do manual labor or work for wages
labour
office
of
Suggestion
in
Pakistan shows that the unemployed skill individuals has increased in the
last
year.
This
was
as a result
of corporate offices opting to go with cheap unskilled minors with poor working conditions rather than unionized adult skilled workforce. These days the lower middle class and poor families can barely make ends meet thanks to the inflated economy. They would prefer for their children to work as manual
labors
someone who works with their hands; someone engaged in manual labor
labourers
labour
for a mediocre salary rather than sending them to school and securing a bright future. I am for children from the age of fourteen years to work for a part time
job but
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job, but
with conditions
such
as, it should not affect
theirs
of them or themselves
their
studies, should not involve hard
labor
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labour, such
labour such
such
as lifting heavy equipment or working a jack hammer and
finally
their pay should be justified.
Finally
the government should
also
be involved and regulate
this
workforce. In case of any violation there should be fined and temporarily banned.
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