It is currently believed that children's behaviour and misconduct is due to the lack of strict discipline and punishment applied by parents. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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It is well known that newer generations of young people are not as polished as past generations were. While kids in the past were polite, respectful and kind to their superiors, now children are permitted to behave wrongly and allowed to show bad manners to those around them. The current line of thought about
this
issue is that parents are not as strict as before, and do not take corrective actions
towars
near
toward
towards
their offspring's behaviour. I totally agree with
this
statement. One of the reasons for modern mothers and fathers to raise their kids by
this
tendency, is that psychology researchers have found that punishments are not the best
way
to correct misconducts. Psychologists suggest that people have to
explain their children
Suggestion
explain to their children
why their actions were wrong, and advise them in a kind
way
how they should act, in order to prevent psychological or self-
steem
(linguistics) the form of a word after all affixes are removed
stem
steam
esteem
damage. Another reason for parents to be
permissive
Suggestion
permitted
nowadays is that they might have experienced themselves a very strict childhood.
For example
, if a young man was raised in a military-like
way
, and that circumstance banned him from enjoying that part of his life, perhaps he will try to avoid raising his children under that line of thought, thinking that by
doung
engage in
doing
this
, his offspring would have better childhood memories than he had. In conclusion, I think that parents' lack of discipline nowadays towards their kids is a very established tendency in the
way
younger generations are currently raised; and in my perspective,
this
is due to recent findings in
human's
Suggestion
human
psychological development and how parents experienced their childhood.
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