Many children are encouraged by their parents to get a part time job in their free time. What are the advantages and disadvantages to children of doing so?

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Mothers and fathers motivate their kids to

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on some days throughout the week.

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the benefits and drawbacks of

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trend. There are many positive aspects of pushing children into employment from a young age.

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, they get to gain

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experience and learn basic qualities like respect, and how to value money.

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is because, a job usually starts in set business hours.

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, when someone earns their money for the

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time, it gives them insight on how to save and spend it.

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, when

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was 12

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worked at KFC, it

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has taught

me to always be on time, because at

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was not punctual, as well as, it

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taught me to respect my elders and how to be financially independent. Overall,

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trend is advantageous. Despite the many benefits, there are

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drawbacks. Many believe that a

childs

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child's

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only job is to have fun.

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, any alteration in

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ideology

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, is considered child labour. The reason for

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is that, kids cannot make their own decisions, so it is seen as against their will.

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, in order for under 18's to be happy they should lead carefree lives, ridden of the burden of responsibility and finances,

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has been proven to be detrimental to one's mental health. To illustrate, a study published in 1990 on the Childrens

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Commitee

a special group delegated to consider some matter

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showed that 99% of children who worked under the age of 12 were morbidly depressed. In conclusion, there are many pro's and con's of youngster employment. In the

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hope that they are given the choice of whether or not they want to

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Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Topic Vocabulary:

responsibility
punctuality
work ethic
financial literacy
budgeting
time management
work experience
career prospects
independence
self-esteem
communication
interpersonal skills
academic responsibilities
school performance
hobbies
relaxation
well-being
stress
fatigue
premature adulthood
childhood experiences

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Your opinion

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