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One of your colleagues Recently got a new job at another Company. Write a letter to him and say you feel about him What you enjoy the most while working together Ask what is future plans are

#colleagues #job #company #future #plans
Dear Naseeb I am writing to congratulate you
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 securing your dream job
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 a senior technical assistant in Tech Mahindra. Working With you is a lifelong experience. I always felt proud and motivated
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 you. What inspires me the most is the leadership quality and
work life
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 balance you maintain.
Although
, there are numerous good experiences while working together.
However
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latest
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 project undertaken by us as
team
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 tops all. How successfully we manage to get
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 for our company and
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 we spent together while pursuing it is unforgettable.
i
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 the moments forever when we won
best
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 team award. Since I know ,you believe in change and growth. So it is unlikely that you remain static at
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 position for long.
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 it is very hard to predict your course of action. So do let me know about your future plans. It will be
great
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 pleasure to be helpful in any respect. Please remain corrected. Wishing you great luck
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future
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 sincerely
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • congratulations
  • appreciate
  • collaboration
  • endeavors
  • future prospects
  • role
  • responsibilities
  • career advancement
  • projects
  • work environment
  • transition
  • keep in touch
  • fortunate
  • professional growth
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