Many parents encourage young people to leave home when they become older, while others think they should stay at home with the family. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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From the moment, people started living together as

one

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unit which is famously known as

family

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a family

families

, its norms and

costumes

money collected under a tariff

customs

have been changing nonstop. These days, lots of mothers and fathers motivate their children to leave

home

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when they are 18 or older, whereas some believe that their young ones are better off living with them. Leaving our hometown and family behind, has a strong plethora of promises. For

one

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, a promise of becoming independent, both financially and spiritually.

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means that, since you are earning money and not your guardians, you get to decide on how to spend your income. Whether to save your salary in a saving account for a rainy day, or go on a fashion spree is utterly your choice. Another promise would be that while living alone is an experience that undoubtedly transform people not only to adults, but

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to more mature humans.

Take

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Tackle

repetitive chores as an example.By solely depending on yourself to do housework

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as vacuuming and dusting, washing up and doing the laundry,

grocessry

a marketplace where groceries are sold

grocery

shopping and sorting out mails,

one

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can count on the fact that they could take care of themselves

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to maintaining a stable life and

home

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. Not being in the same

home

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as your parents might

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create an opportunity for some to see the world, experience wild and unimaginable adventures

first

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hand which can lead to the feeling of belonging and actually being a true member of the society.

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, in my viewpoint, staying with

family

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the family

definitely contains more realistic prospects rather than some hard to reach promises. If

one

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decide

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decides

has decided

is deciding

to keep on staying with their parents, they most probably do not need to seek for a job, or they should not be anxious about paying bills or rent.

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could tremendously reduce the stress level that others face in their workplace or when they are desperately trying to make ends meet.

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, these privileged people could spend their time and focus on flourishing their abilities

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Studying for tertiary education in high-ranked universities, making progress in athletic activities or simply following their childhood dreams without any kind of worries

are

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just to name a few.

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, these lucky young adults are surrounded by their loved ones at all times and continually obtain the love and support from their families. Unlike others, who unfortunately could only manage to see their parents on special occasions

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as Christmas, if they could afford the commuting expenses and

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, if they have met all their deadlines at work. In many countries

such

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as Japan, people had been living with their parents for

genertions

all the people living at the same time or of approximately the same age

generations

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as studies have shown,

have led

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has led

had led

to stronger cultural and family bonding, which is brutally rare in Western countries where children say goodbye to their family at a very young age. To conclude,

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living independently paints a promising and a luring picture for our future, staying

home

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with family could create a true and reliable chance for us to follow our dreams and desires in the comfort of

home

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in the presence of our loving and supporting family.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

515 words

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Many parents encourage young people to leave home when they become older, while others think they should stay at home with the family. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Include an introduction and conclusion

It has been suggested that primary school children should learn how to grow vegetables and keep animals. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

The only way to improve road safety is to have stricter punishments for driving offenders.

Many people say smoking should be banned and some say it is not a good idea. What is your opinion on this?

An increased number of people today change their career more than once in their lives. What are the reasons of this trend? Is it a positive or negative development?