IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 5

For centuries, importan parts of education have remained such reading, writing and maths. With the advent of computers, some people think that computer skill be made as a fourth skill to added to the list. to what extent do you agree?

#centuries #importan #parts #education #maths #advent #computers #people #computer #skill #list
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
For hundreds of years, the education played an important role in people’s lives. Skills like maths, reading and writing have remained and considered to be critical parts an education. Nowadays, some people believe that with the invention of the computers, computing skill needs to be added to the list. I strongly agree with the statement because the technology has touched the lives of each and every human on the planet and there is no going back from it. Until a quarter century ago, many people on the planet never heard about a computer. All the daily activities were literally never dependent of any computing power. Fast forward to 2019, it is very difficult to imagine a life without the computers because all our finances and careers are directly or indirectly dependent on the computers. Without the skill of handling the computers, it will be really a difficult life to lead in the modern era.
For example
Linking Words
, 15 years ago, people used to visit banks for all the financial transactions and send letters to communicate with each other. Now, the people are communicating with each other instantly and doing all the economic transactions without stepping out of the comfort zone. The technology has transformed the life of humans like never before.
Nature
Suggestion
The nature
 of the jobs has changed over the period of time, for most of the jobs these days, the computing skill is mandatory. Taking the future of the younger generation
in to
expresses motion to a point on, or within, something
into
 the consideration, computers must be introduced
in to
expresses motion to a point on, or within, something
into
 the academics right from the primary school. To conclude, a person without knowing maths and physics can still survive in the society, but without the knowledge of computers, he will be treated as an illiterate.
Submitted by iamluckyster1000 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: