Employers sometimes ask people applying for jobs for personal information, such as their hobbies and interests, and whether they are married or single. Some people say that this information may be relevant and useful. Others disagree. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

It is common that resumes include individuals' private details,
for example
, marital status and
something regarded with special favor or liking
pastimes. The reason why they contain
is because companies believe that it will give a fuller picture of the
. Based on those details
Accept space
the human resources department can know whether the
is what they are looking for or not.
, there
a large amount of people who argue that
personal data should be protected and even if it exposed to employers, it won't help to recruit better employees. In my opinion, the
about interests and hobbies is not beneficial to companies and it is difficult to know the people's passions from the
employees' characteristics
the employees' characteristics
enhances the possibility to recruit the people who meet the requirements of the company. Even the most used characteristic
is not perfect to tell people's personality. How can the simple message about interests can give you more accurate
, the best employees are not chosen from the messages, and the messages do not always really show the
For instance
, the resume I
have uploaded
always included that the instrument,
a period marked by distinctive character or reckoned from a fixed point or event
is one of my hobbies. I played Erhu for 4 years, when I was in elementary school. Even though I played it for a long time, it is not one of my hobbies. The instrument was chosen by my parents. Playing it for a long time doesn't show any of my preference. To summarise, releasing people's personal
doesn't give any more details about the
, and it is still hard to sketch the outline of the
, it is better to protect private details, and not share them with every employer.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • job application
  • personal information
  • hobbies and interests
  • marital status
  • relevant
  • useful
  • privacy
  • assessing candidates
  • qualifications
  • experience
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