Some believe that is is the responsibility of people to take care about the environment. Others say it is the government that should take care of the environment. Discuss both views and state your opinion.

Many
thinks
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think
that it is the responsibility of people to protect the nature while others say it is the government that should be protecting it. Both the views will be shared before arriving to
suitable conclusion
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a suitable conclusion
. Human kind
has been exploiting
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exploited
mother earth for many
years which
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years, which
has increased in recent years. People have used resource in many
ways
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ways, for
for
example using
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example, using
air conditioner can negatively impact
temperature
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the temperature
of earth in mass scale. Since, air conditioner produces greenhouse gases responsible for ozone layer depletion.
This
has resulted in increased overall increase temperature and we know
this
effect as “Greenhouse effect”.
This
is one
such
instance of
individual’s contribution
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the individual’s contribution
an individual’s contribution
towards
detrimental impact
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the detrimental impact
on
environment
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the environment
. So, many
thinks
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think
that people should be responsible for their acts for saving the nature. On the other side, people think that industries that are polluting our rivers cannot be restrained from endangering quality of water due to
high monetary greed
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the high monetary greed
of industry owners.
Moreover
, it is difficult for normal individual to stop them in stopping them. These companies located near river banks continuously releasing their dangerous waste material in
water
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the water
as well as in
air
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the air
. Thereby, polluting the river which is habitat for many
creature
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creatures
living in
water
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the water
.
Such
type of pollution happens on large scale compared to individual contribution in harming the environment.
Therefore
, some
believes
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believe
government should take appropriate actions to curb harmful companies. In my opinion, both individual and government should be made responsible and it will go hand in hand for preventing deteriorating activities of individuals as well as large scale organizations.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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