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One of the best methods to motivate and encourage workers is to pay them according to what they produce or sell. Do you think this is the best method?

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All the companies explore the wide variety of ways to motivate their
work
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 force, there is a common belief that the best to inspire and motivate an
employee
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 is by paying them based on what the productivity. I think, it is the right way to encourage the worker to stay on the top. Every year, the companies spend huge amounts of time and money to encourage their employees to meet the targets. It is a win-win situation for both, the
employee
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 and the employer because the performance of the employer depends on the
employee
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 and vice versa.
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, if the employees get underpaid for what they have achieved, it clearly
demotivates
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 them from putting same or
extra amount
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an extra amount
 of effort to get the
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 done. There are plenty of studies that proved, the money is the single most important motivational factor that
effects
have an effect upon
affects
 the performance an
employee
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. All the big multinational companies follow
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 strategy, especially online retailers like Amazon, Alibaba and Flipkart have been doing
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 for a long time. Since the low end jobs in these companies are
labor
a social class comprising those who do manual labor or work for wages
labour
 intensive, workers get paid based on the target achievement, paying less doesn’t make any sense for
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 a heavy duty jobs.
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, they are other ways to inspire the workforce, two of them are the
work
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 satisfaction and the stress-free
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 life balance, but the most effective and proven way is
high
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higher
 pay. To conclude, money is the best motivational factor for anyone in any scenario in the modern day world, the entire humanity is running behind it, leaving everything else
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 the dust.
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