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Many students are taught to push themselves to try and be better than other students, rather than work together for everyone’s benefits. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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It is true that a lot of students are trained to push themselves and compete
to
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with
 their classmates
instead
 of studying in a
group
 for mutual benefits. While I acknowledge that there are some advantages of competition, I believe that the drawbacks do outweigh the benefits. On the one hand, there are some benefits of competitiveness that are considered as an efficient way to achieve
goal
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the goal
a goal
goals
. The primary benefit is that children will become more mature, independent and dedicated. Competing with others forces students to obtain
high score
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a high score
high scores
 in
class
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the class
,
thus
, they have to equip themselves with a reservoir of knowledge by self-study and searching more materials. Another benefit is competition enable students to have enough
skills to run in
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skills to run
 a
harsh
solid-hoofed herbivorous quadruped domesticated since prehistoric times
horse
 race in the future.
Therefore
, when they are employed, it is possible for them to climb
career ladder
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the career ladder
 and
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
 ambition of success.
On the other hand
, it seems to me that
group
 study is the best choice for student progress.
Firstly
, in a
group
 with mixed-ability students, advanced students can experience the satisfaction of helping less-able learners and modelling more complex ideas.
This
 practice not only builds confidence in the advanced students but
also
 helps weak students move forward and have more intriguing learning methods.
Secondly
, collaboration requires students to have teamwork and communication skills, which are
practical necessity
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a practical necessity
practical necessities
 in their future. By these skills, it is easy for students to get along with their counterpart in their jobs and foster the relationship bond. In conclusion, while competition promotes
self-study ability
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the self - study ability
 of children, I believe that studying in a
group
 should be applied for a majority of students.
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