Some people believe that unpaid community services should be part of high school programs. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

Volunteer service rendition in communities has recently been debated. While certain groups for individual are of the view that
school
children should be
involve
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involved
in village voluntary services.
However
, I disagree with
this
considering the poor academic performance
this
will proffer and
also
because services to the
community
should be optional.
on
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On
the one hand
,
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,
some proponent
argue
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argues
that
school
children should render services voluntarily to their
community
and I disagree.
This
is because with
this
kind of services,
school
children will devote less time for their academic activities with resultant poor performance and low grades which will negatively impact on their future.
For instance
,
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,
in a study by an academic body in 2010, showed that student who were involved in
community
services had very poor grades compared to those who did not. Seeing in
this
light
,
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,
it is undeniable fact that
community
services can influence the child academics and future negatively.
on
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On
another hand
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the other hand
other hand
,
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,
unpaid
community
services should be optional.
This
is because not every student cherish getting involved in
work
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the work
which they will have no wages for and
therefore
should not be persuaded to do so.
Furthermore
,
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,
voluntary services by students is not necessary
since
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for
this
kind of services is part of punishment given to prisoners.
there
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There
is no need for
such
services as it was
mend
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mends
for criminals. It is incontrovertible that unpaid services should be done willingly and not enforcing it on them. In conclusion,
besides
that voluntary service to the
community
should be optional and
also
considering overall poor
schools
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school
schools'
performances of students who engaged in
this services
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this service
these services
,
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,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
disagree that volunteering services without
renumeration
something that remunerates
remuneration
should be part of
school programs
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the school program
school program
a school program
. I recommend that people should not be persuaded to perform
such
services
.
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.
It should be purely by Choice
.
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.
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