As the world becomes technologically advanced, computers are replacing people at more and more jobs. What are some job positions that may be lost because of computers? What are some problems that may result from this situation?

People have welcomed computers as
means
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a means
the means
of making work easier. At the same
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time, however
however
, computers have
also
eliminated many jobs by making the human workers obsolete. On the one hand, the job performance of computers is often less than adequate. A number of jobs have been lost
as a result
of computer technology. Human ticket agents
,
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,
for example
, are virtually nonexistent these days. The number of bank tellers have
also
been greatly reduced due to automated bank machines. Customer service help lines are almost entirely automated. A few years ago, I worked as an assistant at a library. Today, that position doesn’t exist because the library has installed computers that do most of the same work I did. The number of positions lost to computers continues to grow, along with unemployment. While computers can easily carry out routine tasks, they often fall short when a customer has a unique request or problem
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An automated ticket agent doesn’t have insight about an entertainment district and can’t offer friendly directions to a tourist. An automated teller machine can’t provide assistance and reassurance when a customer’s bank card has been stolen.
Besides
, more often than not, automated telephone operators cannot answer the one question we have and we end up waiting on line to speak to a real person anyway. In the future, I believe a new business trend will evolve. As coming
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eliminates
jobs, new positions will have to be invented. More and more people will go into business for themselves and
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I hope, put the personal touch back into
business
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the business
. I believe that the human workforce will demonstrate that it is more valuable than computers

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