Some people do not mind to spend their leisure time with their colleagues while some people prefer to keep their private life separate from their work life. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some people do not have problem in spending their free
time
with their
officemates
whereas some like to maintain their personal
life
isolated from their professional
life
. Both the sides of the
life
are important,
however
, personal
life
should not mingle with
work
life
. In
this
highly competitive era, professionals go
extra mile
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the extra mile
in building relationship with their colleagues by investing their leisure
time
with them.
Moreover
,
this
is particularly true with managers who wants to inculcate team spirit in their subordinates. Eventually, increasing productivity of
entire team
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the entire team
an entire team
, since everyone participate positively and support each other on any project for their team.
Additionally
, as per studies presented in
UK
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the UK
, employees remain loyal to their bosses if they share
strong bond
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a strong bond
with them.
Therefore
, there is
well known quote
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the well known quote
a well known quote
which says, “People do not leave companies, but they leave their bosses”. On the other side, some
strongly vouch
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strongly vouches
for
work
life
balance and wants both the parts of
life
independent of each other. The reason behind
such
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
is sparing dedicated
time
for the family and give complete attention to loved ones.
Hence
, individuals’ can provide
time
to multiple events in his family
for example
, attending his kids’ school events, taking
wife
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a wife
the wife
wives
for picnic and many more. On top of that a person can be more productive at
work
front, if personal
life
is stress free. In my opinion, utilization of weekends with family members can hugely benefit a person on both
work
as well as personal front, as
this
helps
person
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the person
to rejuvenate and allow him to concentrate well where ever he is allocating his
time
.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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