Some people feel that entertainers such as film stars, pop musicians or sports stars are paid too much money. Do you agree or disagree? Which other types of job should be highly paid?

Over the
last
10 years, the entertainment industry has risen to a significant level, making it capable to pay its actor and artist a good amount of salary.
This
eventually inclined the people to develop the same mentality and even I agree with the
given opinion
Suggestion
opinion given
. In
this
essay, I will discuss the main reason behind
this
,
also
some other related profession which needs to be paid more for the amount commitment put it in. The hard work and the dedication put in behind the lens while recording a movie or songs, cannot be even compensated by the high pay.
Additionally
, being an actor, artist or a
sportsperson
bring
Suggestion
brings
a lot of social responsibilities with it, as you are the person who always remains in the limelight of the society and
furthermore
the young generation refers to your action in each case.
For instance
, Nikhil Sharma, a famous YouTube creator in India generates around 30 lakh
rupee
Suggestion
rupees
from the regular video production,
besides
this
his followers always find him
indulged
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indulging
in social activities, which is used as social norms and can
also
attract others to the same.
However
, there are some professions
such
as doctors, teachers, and
Defense
(military) military action or resources protecting a country against potential enemies
defence
personnel which are often not paid less compared to the work involved in their services.
For example
, a Traffic Police Inspector
works
Suggestion
has worked
unbroken for 14 hours a day in extremely hazardous conditions which can
also
affect its physical and mental fitness, just to entitle his family for a better tomorrow and enable them to reach great heights. To Sum up, I believe that no one can deny the amount of diligence and regularity required in
such
the fields of sports and film industry, which can be a justification for
the high
Suggestion
higher
pay.
Moreover
, there are some other sections of the society work which remains
unrevealed
eminent beyond or above comparison
unrivalled
in common eye that requires the same facilities.

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