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Compare the percentages of travelers to go to work in a country in Europe

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The bar chart gives information the proportion of commuters go to work in a Europe country by four types of transports
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 as bus, car, bike, and on foot in the year 1950, 1970 and 1990. Overall, it is true that there was a downward trend for the percentage of car users, compared to an increasing trend in the proportion of commuters on foot and by bike. The proportion of bus purchases started at 20% in 1950,
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 rising to soar to a peak of roughly 20% in 1970 before slightly decreasing to below 20%. On the one hand, a slight decrease of over 25% in the number of walkers was recorded for the period from 35% in 1950 to 10% in 1990;
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, the figure for bike drivers significantly dropped from below 30% in 1950 to more than 5%. There was a dramatic increase in the number of car drivers from approximately 7% in 1950 to 25% in 1970, and
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 shooting up to a peak of nearly 37% in the year 1990.
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