Some people believe that a gap year between school and university is a good idea, while others disagree strongly. Consider both sides of this debate and present your own opinion. You should give reasons for your answer, and include ideas and examples from your own knowledge and experience. Write at least 250 words

Nowadays, many high school graduates have been advised to take a gap year before university.
Although
some people believe that it can greatly benefit a person, many
others including
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others, including
myself believe
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myself, believe
it to be a waste of time. One of the main reasons why students have been encouraged to undertake a gap year is to broaden their horizons and explore the world. It is through their journey and travels will they fully understand the society around them, something that cannot be learnt through textbooks.
For example
, many students who have the privilege of going to school do not understand those that could not due to financial reasons or societal reasons.
However
, through their volunteer work in these
under developed
relating to societies in which capital needed to industrialize is in short supply
underdeveloped
areas, are they fully able to comprehend these problems and grow as a person. Contrastingly, many of those that oppose the extra break believe that it is merely a waste of time and money. Going abroad and volunteering in different countries across the globe is not cheap and is costly.
For example
, in order to travel you need to prepare your accomodation, visa, and travel insurance. These costs are mainly burned by the parent, which leads to the child being dependent on their parents for
extras
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extra
years.
Instead
, if they had gone straight to
university
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university, then they
then
they would be able to get a job faster and become independent. In conclusion,
although
going
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to take
a sabbatical allows graduates to grow and experience societal values it can lead to financial strains on the family.
Therefore
, I believe that gap years are a waste of time.

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