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Finding job satisfaction is considered to be very luxury in developing countries. Why do you think that is? Do you think job satisfaction is important?

In most of the developing nations
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satisfaction
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 considered as a luxury because, it is linked to the employee’s professional as well as the personal
life
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. In my opinion, the
job
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satisfaction
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 is extremely important and if an employee is happy with his
work
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, he will perform very efficiently and productively. The
work
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 ethics and daily practices are defined in most the companies by the human resource department. If these policies are really satisfying the employee’s expectations they will definitely love their
job
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. In developing countries, an organization are providing facilities
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 as, healthy working environment,
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 and health insurances including their family, availing
work
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 from home, yearly increments and bonus’s etc. These all facilities are means a lot for an employee during his or her employment serving period.
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, according to a survey conducted in the Canada on happiness index relating to their
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life
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, which exemplifies, 85% the people are happy with their employment and they believe it is all driven well as a treat due to standardization of the
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 practices.
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 to
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,
job
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satisfaction
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 plays a vital role in an employee’s personal
life
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 too. The people who are really like what they are doing, they serve better, efficiently and more productively. The satisfied employee’s personal and professional
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 is stress free, and
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 they can enjoy their
life
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 fully.
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 kinds of person’s have fewer complaints about their
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,
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 and even family as –well.
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, in reference to a survey conducted by Unicef Inc., in 2010 regarding an employment
satisfaction
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 and they were interviewed around 2000 people around the globe. They came to result that, the people who are satisfied with their
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 are happier as comparing to unsatisfied one, they have more time for their family and regularly they enjoy short picnic plans with their family and friends. To conclude, in my opinion, considering the
job
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satisfaction
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 as a luxury really worth it, when, it comes to happiness on the personal as well the professional level. At the end of the day
job
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satisfaction
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 really matter in everyone’s
life
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.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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