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The table illustrates the 6 languages which are the most popular in the world with the number of people use it.

The table illustrates the 6 languages which are the most popular in the world with the number of people use it.
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overall
, mandarin
chinese
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 is the biggest
language
 in total users in the world. Meanwhile, immediately after it,
english
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English
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 is 2nd most popular with great
contribute
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 from
number
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a number
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 of
speakers
 as an additional
language
. Hindi, Spanish, Arabic and Portuguese fall behind them.
According to
 the table, 900
million
 in the
number
 of native
speakers
 plus 190
million
speakers
 of an additional
language
 lead mandarin
chinese
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Chinese
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 to the 1st rank in
total
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a total
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number
 of
speakers
 with 1090
million
.
while
 the figure
of
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first
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the first
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language
 in
english
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English
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 is 339
million
,
however
, only
english
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English
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 has the
number
 of
speakers
 as an additional
language
 bigger than native
speakers
with
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almost double in the quantity
with
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of
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 603
million
. the figure
of
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speakers
 in both
first
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the first
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 and additional
language
 in
portuguese
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 is the lowest with 203
million
 and 10
million
 , respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words language, number, speakers, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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