Some people think that having a set retirement age (e.g. 65 years) for everybody, regardless of occupation, is unfair. They believe that certain workers deserve to retire and receive a pension at an earlier age. Do you agree or disagree? Which types of workers do you think should benefit from early retirement?

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Certain members of the society consider that retiring a particular

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is biased. They are

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of the opinion that particular set of workers can retire and earn a pension before a stipulated

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opinion.

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, there are some occupations which does not need to adhere to early retirement option. Occupations related to the technology or services

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do not involve

physical activity, typically their office environment is quite comfortable. Not only the people in

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industry have less physical

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they have minimal mental stress.

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allows them to

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till they cross the

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of 65 or even

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coming at a subsequent time or stage

later

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, these people have

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a better work life balance

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life balance due to the flexibility of the

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timings.

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, people working in

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sector should be allowed to retire only after reaching the specified

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. There are other types of

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which involve high physical and mental activities. These involve occupations like army services, fire-fighting, doctors etc.

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set of people

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does not have

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, they are required to be on duty basis the situation because of

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their

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life balance is hampered. Since, the nature of the

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is very intense it takes a toll on their physical and mental

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well being

. In these cases the people should be allowed to retire at an

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of their choice. In conclusion, the

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of retirement is highly correlated to the type of

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that person does. Companies and organizations should consider

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while setting the

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limit for retirement, thereby there is mutual benefit.

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 5.0

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Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Many believe that being good at a sport is result of talent while others think that it comes from hard work. Discuss both views and give your reasons.

Nowadays, many people have easy access to computers and a large number of children play computer games.

Some employers want to be able to contact their staff all the time including holidays. Do you think the advantages of this are more than its disadvantages?

In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?