As Global trade increases, many goods including those we use on a daily basis, are produced in other countries and have to be transported long distances. Do the benefits of this trend outweigh the draw backs?

In recent years,
increase
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the increase
in world trade has gradually led to most goods and day to day products being manufactured in far countries which are
then
transported back through long distances. In my opinion, the drawbacks far outweigh any benefits
thay
people in general
they
that
may come from exportation of these produced goods. Admittedly, there are some basic benefits of
having goods been manufactured
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were goods manufactured
having goods being manufactured
are goods manufactured
are goods manufacturing
outside the
country
which definitely reflects with
increase
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an increase
the increase
in the trade business globally.
Firstly
, the high quality of goods made as
result
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a result
of the use of great standard and refined materials used to achieve the final result.
Secondly
, the presence and access to heavy duty machinery which facilitates the process achieving much in a little time frame.
For instance
, the availability of stable electricity supple makes branding of unique designs and smooth packaging of
final produce
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the final produce
hence
great feedbacks from
customer
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customers
the customer
.
Nevertheless
, despite the benefits above
,
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,
I believe the
country
could face a serious difficulty if there is a continuation in these
trend
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trends
. One potentially dangerous problem is that it exposes the
countries
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country's
economy to a
down side
a negative aspect of something that is generally positive
downside
. In some countries, take
India
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India, for
for example
the citizens depend solely on sale of their locally produced items to feed and cater for their family
,
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,
They do
these
denotes a person or thing
this
by selling to outside communities to generate funds and when
such
is taken away from them they may face harsh conditions and of course there would not economic growth in the
country
. Another obvious issue is the
over head
located or originating from above
overhead
cost of production and moving the goods would definitely be added to each item when
finally
sold.
This
is a major concern because most of these items can be manufactured with available locally sourced materials which could boost the economy of the
country
to the outside world. In conclusion, the economic drawbacks of exporting manufactured produce including those used on
daily basis
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a daily basis
far outweigh any benefits it may bring.
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