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Television dominates the free-time of too many people. It can make people lazy and prevent them from socializing with others. Do you agree or disagree?

#television #free-time #people
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In
20th century
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the 20th century
,
Television
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 is
one
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 of the major entertainments for most of the people in the world.
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 essay agrees that many people prefer only to watch
television
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 in their free
time
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, which makes them lazy and prevent them from socializing with others.
Inspite
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In spite
 of many advanced technology available in
20th century
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the 20th century
 for an entertainment, people still prefer to stick with watching
television
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in
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at
 their free
time
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.
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 is because of several
number
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numbers
 of
program
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programs
 available in multiple channels.
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, climatic change is
also
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one
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 of the main
reason
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reasons
 for people prefer to stick with the
television
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 during their leisure period. In countries like, India, Srilanka, and middle east countries,
temperature
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the temperature
 could reach
upto
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up to
 50 degrees.
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 makes people not to go out and sit at home. Which, ultimately makes them to watch programs
in
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on
television
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. People started to feel comfortable by sitting at their own place, having food and watching programs in
television
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. After
one
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 point of
time
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,
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 makes them very lazy to go out. Most of the people, get addicted to
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 as it is
more comfort
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more comfortable
 to them. Some people, avoid going out with friends and families during the weekends in their free
time
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.
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 makes them to miss their social life and project them as a loner. Some of the people, ends up in getting separated from their family because of the above said behaviours. In conclusion,
television
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 plays a major role in
one
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's life.
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It's
adviced
having the benefit of careful prior consideration or counsel
advised
advice
 to everyone, not to get more attached to it rather than spending quality
time
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 with friends and families. Spending quality
time
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 with people, gives you more positive energy and makes you to feel fresh.
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