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In some countries, secondary schools aim to provide a general education across a range of subjects. In others, children focus on a narrow range of subjects related to a particular career. Which of these two systems is more appropriate in today’s world?

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Secondary school curricula have drawn major public attention to their spectrum of subjects. While an
education
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program
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 containing a wide range of subjects would be beneficial to some extent, I firmly believe that a career-oriented one would be a better choice. A
curriculum providing
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curriculum, providing
 general knowledge of diverse subjects benefits secondary students in different ways. The most obvious benefit is that students could gain the overview of a wide range of subjects, helping them grasp an overall understanding of different aspects of life and develop essential personal skills. Without the general knowledge of Math, writers, singers, and actors would find daunting difficulties in managing their family or personal finance. Vice versa,
economists
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the economists
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are
 in Math and Finance would fail to explain
socio-economic
involving social as well as economic factors
socioeconomic
 matters if they do not have a background in social sciences. Another clear benefit is that an
education
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program
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 with various subjects empowers students with essential orientation to determine their career passions which seldom come into shape during their teenage years. Students have the opportunities to get exposed to and engaged in various subjects to identify their occupation fields of interest.
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, I am of the opinion that a specialized training curriculum is a better choice because it would facilitate secondary students’ future career preparation. The primary reason is that
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 a training
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 allows students to nurture in-depth knowledge and skills in the occupation that they set their
heats
a form of whist in which players avoid winning tricks containing hearts or the queen of spades
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 on, paving a way for major professional advances. In the current overwhelmingly competitive
labor
a social class comprising those who do manual labor or work for wages
labour
 market, having a profound insight into a particular field would endow young students with ultimate advantages over other candidates, and,
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, provide them with brighter job opportunities.
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, an
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program
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 with a strong focus on profession-oriented modules can maximize students’ study efforts and investment. In the era of overloading information, concentrating on a few subjects would be the wisest learning way which could guarantee the usefulness and fruitfulness of investment in
education
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. In conclusion, while the option of teaching diverse subjects has its merits, I contend that specialized training system provides
favorable
encouraging or approving or pleasing
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 and optimal professional preparation for secondary students to lead successful career paths.
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