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In many countries, mainly tourists, but not local people visit museums and historical sites.Why does this happening and what can be done to attract more local people to visit these places.

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Whilst, in some nations, museums and historical sites are less attractive of local individuals rather than to tourists. I will discuss about
this
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, why
this
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 is occurring and put some solutions in the following paragraphs. To embark with, there are myriad reasons, why I am claiming that tourists more attractive towards art galleries and historical places than local masses. The
first
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 and important reasons, most
resident
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residents
 have been growing up in
there
of them or themselves
their
 area and they have been studying from long time about
there
of them or themselves
their
 museums and historical places.
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, they think that these places are not running anywhere from there; they have less interested to
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visit in that places
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visit that place
visit in that place
.
Furthermore
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, some people believe visiting far away places, which are much different from their area; they can take new experience from that historical sites and museums. Contrary above
to
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with
 the statement, several causes can be taken to appeal native humanity to
visit
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 their local attraction. Promoting and introducing these historical places and museums in the television with the help of
media
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the media
; which is
good way
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a good way
for
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of
 encouraging the local individuals. When local native watch these sites in television commercial level,
then
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 local humankinds more interested about their attraction.
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 to, offering some free tickets for local citizens, they can easily
visit
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 their local attraction. Many mankinds belong to lower middle class families, they can afford to buy tickets. If it is free one day of the month for local humanity;
then
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 more individuals attractive for historical sites and museums. To conclude, historical sites and museums to important for both local people and tourists. But some promotion and create new exhibition, the number of people
visit
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 historical sites and museums.
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