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Artists need a certain amount of freedom to develop their creativity. Some people think that artists should have total freedom to express any thoughts and ideas. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some believe that artists require creative freedom to express themselves, while
other
plural of other; the people or things not already mentioned
others
 think that it might have a detrimental effect on the
society
.
This
 essay will argue that despite that artists have the ability to influence many individuals negatively, the benefit of being able to raise social awareness through their work of art far outweighs any negative drawback. Artists act as role models for many people, and a lot of them have the power to influence young adults negatively. Musicians and film makers glorify the use of alcohol and smoking by promoting it in their music and films.
Consequently
, a lot of young adults who look up to these artists, follow them and get hooked onto these bad habits.
For example
, according to the survey conducted by the American Music Association, 30% of musical rappers promote
use
Suggestion
the use
 of alcohol and drugs in their lyrics, and they amount for the highest fan base in the world.
However
, there are many other artists who influence positively with their work, and people have the option to follow artists who inspire them positively. Granting creative freedom to artists allows them to raise awareness
on
Suggestion
of
 social causes through their art. By infusing topics
such
 as poverty, social caste systems and inequality, in their work, artists can spread awareness about their negative effects on the
society
.
For example
, Danny Boyle, director of the film “Slumdog millionaire”, won many accolades for accurately depicting the poor conditions of the slums in Mumbai. Eventually, the issue was raised by the central government and special funds were reserved for
this
 section of the
society
.
This
 shows that artists can have a positive impact on the
society
. In conclusion, the social contributions to the
society
 by artists outweighs the supposed negative impact that they might have on the general public.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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