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The chart below shows the proportions of adults in Canada who own one car, two cars, more than two cars, or who do not own a car. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the proportions of adults in Canada who own one car, two cars, more than two cars, or who do not own a car. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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the given pie chart
illustrate
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illustrates
show examples
car
 owners of
canadian
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Canadian
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 people which have
number
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a number
the number
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of
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apply
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between none or more than
two
. A glance at the graph
show
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shows
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 that known of
ceratain
Correct your spelling
certain
 vast majority
citizen
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of citizen
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have
Change the verb form
has
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 got a
car
.
It is clear that
 more than half of
citizen
Fix the agreement mistake
citizens
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 have one
car
 which
Add a missing verb
is colored
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colored
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coloured
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 blue and a tiny proportion of
Correct article usage
the
show examples
pie
Add a missing verb
is hold
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hold
Wrong verb form
held
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 by
lack
Correct article usage
a lack
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 of
car
owner
Fix the agreement mistake
owners
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 which is
ilustrated
Correct your spelling
illustrated
 orange colour.
Green
Correct article usage
The green
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colored
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coloured
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 side
show
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shows
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that
Correct determiner usage
the
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two
car
 owner. there is
holding
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a holding
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 quarter of
pie
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the pie
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 graph. One
of
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apply
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third
Add an article
the third
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 people can not buy a
car
. There is
moderate
Correct article usage
a moderate
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 proportion value as
two
car
 owners .
however
,
Correct article usage
a totally
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totally
Replace the word
total
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two
Change preposition
of two
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 and no
owner
Fix the agreement mistake
owners
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 does not achieve one
car
owners
Change noun form
owner's
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 number.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words car, two with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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