There is an increasing amount of advertising directed at children, which encourages them to buy goods such as toys and snacks. Many parents are worried that these advertisements put too much pressure on children, while some advertisers claim that they provide useful information to children. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

In the world today
,
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,
advertisement
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an advertisement
is an important marketing strategy which companies use to provide information about their goods.
However when
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However, when
this
is directed at children, parents are concerned that it puts unnecessary stress on the children. I quite agree with the parents.
Firstly
, children can be very persistent when they want something not minding if it’s good or bad for them.
Advertisement
, via any media, frequently exposes the child to some goods which
further
increases the child’s desire for these
things
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things, therefore
therefore
if they can’t have these products, it becomes a problem.
For example
, a child that sees a particular toy
that is
constantly advertised in a store and steals it just so he could have it.
Furthermore
, some
advertisement
are
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is
exaggerated which
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exaggerated, which
increases the expectations of the users and
this
makes them disappointed.
However
,
advertisement
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the advertisement
is a useful means of providing information
such
as how, where, when or who to use a certain product.
For
instance is
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instance, is
a milk box which is sometimes difficult for children to
open but
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open, but
when
this
is described and demonstrated on a
television
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television advertisement, it
advertisement
it becomes easier for the child to use.
Also there
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Also, there
are some snacks that contain ingredients that some children may be allergic
to and
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to, and
this
information is sometimes provided in the
advertisement
. In conclusion, creating awareness about goods is important for children because it keeps them informed and makes usage
easier
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easier, although
although
it sometimes creates unnecessary pressure for both the parents and children.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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