There is an increasing amount of advertising directed at children, which encourages them to buy goods such as toys and snacks. Many parents are worried that these advertisements put too much pressure on children, while some advertisers claim that they provide useful information to children. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

In the world today
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an advertisement
is an important marketing strategy which companies use to provide information about their goods.
However when
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However, when
is directed at children, parents are concerned that it puts unnecessary stress on the children. I quite agree with the parents.
, children can be very persistent when they want something not minding if it’s good or bad for them.
, via any media, frequently exposes the child to some goods which
increases the child’s desire for these
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things, therefore
if they can’t have these products, it becomes a problem.
For example
, a child that sees a particular toy
that is
constantly advertised in a store and steals it just so he could have it.
, some
exaggerated which
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exaggerated, which
increases the expectations of the users and
makes them disappointed.
the advertisement
is a useful means of providing information
as how, where, when or who to use a certain product.
instance is
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instance, is
a milk box which is sometimes difficult for children to
open but
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open, but
is described and demonstrated on a
television advertisement, it
it becomes easier for the child to use.
Also there
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Also, there
are some snacks that contain ingredients that some children may be allergic
to and
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to, and
information is sometimes provided in the
. In conclusion, creating awareness about goods is important for children because it keeps them informed and makes usage
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easier, although
it sometimes creates unnecessary pressure for both the parents and children.
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