Many children are encouraged by their parents to get a part time job in their free time. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this

Remmy: Parents are increasingly encouraging their children to get a
job
during their free
time
.
Althoug
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Although
, children will lack some sufficient
time
to
rest but
Accept comma addition
rest, but
they will eventually develop a significant value for
money
right from their early age. In my opinion, working during
this
time
will be
benefial
promoting or enhancing well-being
beneficial
then
being idle despite that it takes their resting
time
.
To begin
with, working at
this
time
will help them to develop value for
money
, as they will
also
have experience on how easy or hard to earn a dollar. A very good example of
this
is, when I was in high school, earning approximately #50 per day, I always appreciate whatever amount of
money
given to me by my parent. For
this
reason, getting a
job
in
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at
this
time
will be incomparably essential.
Conversely
, while it is possible to get a
job
by
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with
these children during
this
crucial
time
will deprive them from a significant quality
rest
, which they
uoght
expresses an emotional, practical, or other reason for doing something
ought
to have enjoyed. And
besides
, it is obvious that, the free
time
that
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that's
supposed to be spent on
rest
would have
be
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been
used
working
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to work
for
money
.
For instance
, I had no
time
to
rest
while I spent the highest part of my free
time
working, when I was in high school and I ended up
dozen
a light fitful sleep
dozing
doze
off in class most times. On that note, utilizing the free
time
to work should be discouraged. To conclude, ultimately, getting a part
time
job
by
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with
the children during their free
time
has become incredibly common. Undergoing working experience helps them to develop value for
money
as they
also loses
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also lose
their
time
for
rest
. From my point of view, working at
this
precious
time
is more beneficial to both children and their parents
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