Students are becoming more and more reliant on computers. What are some problems associated with reliance on computer and what are some of the possible solutions

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Computer
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act as
important machine
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an important machine
for students to do all the school related
work
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, so most of the pupils depend on it.
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the principle problem is
students allowing
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students, allowing
machine to do all the
work
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for them without thinking for themselves and a possible solution
is
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are
to have stricter supervisions from
teacher
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and parents.
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,
this
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essay will discuss the problem that
computer
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is acting as a spoon feeding for students to complete all their school
work
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and the solution
of
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to
this
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issue is supervision should have on them by their mentors
Firstly
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, the major problem of
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issue is pupils take a help of
computer
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for completing all the school works like assignments and
project
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. As the result of
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this
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these
students can’t think of their own for assignment and can’t improve their knowledge about the topic if they are getting all the information without taking any efforts for it. And
this
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will not help them to face
competitive world
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the competitive world
. University research shows in Times of Bombay that 60% students complete their assignments with
help
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the help
of
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computer
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the computer
a computer
computers
rather than completing themselves.
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the solution for
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assertion is parents or
teacher
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should supervise their
work
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and encourage them to complete assignment on their own.
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However
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However, this
this
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can help to improve their thinking ability and boost their
confident
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confidence
for
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in
doing their
project
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independently. For instant working on
project
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teacher
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should ask the their students to think and make at least rough
project
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and
then
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take the help of
computer
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if needed , so
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can help them to improve their ideas and knowledge about the topics In conclusion, dependence of student on
computer
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can be avoided by parents and
teacher
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by supervising on them properly and encourage them to complete the
work
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independently
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