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There has been a dramatic growth in the number of people studying at universities in the last few decades. While some people see this as a positive trend which raises the general level of education within the community, others fear that it is lowering the quality of education. What are the advantages and disadvantages of the increase in student numbers at university?

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Over the
last
 century, tertiary
education
 has become available to more people than ever before.
Although
this
 can be beneficial for individuals and for society as a whole, some people argue that the growth in student numbers is having a negative impact on the standard of
education
. The worldwide expansion of tertiary
education
 has been a positive trend for those involved. It has enabled more people to realise their capabilities, gain a qualification and pursue a career that interests them.
Furthermore
, jobs that require a tertiary
education
 are often well paid and
thus
 allow those people to enjoy a higher quality of life.
This
 in turn helps to raise the standard of living of society through economic development.
However
, the growing availability of
further
education
also
 has some drawbacks. A growth in student numbers has at times led to
much larger classes
Suggestion
a much larger class
much larger class
.
As a result
, teachers are often too busy to give sufficient attention to their students. In some cases
this
 may cause a drop in standards and
this
 could make it easier for students to pass.
Thus
, universities are in danger of being seen as “degree factories” in which the quantity of
students
Suggestion
student
students'
 rates higher than the quality of
education
. In conclusion, a university
education
 can be a significant and positive step in a person’s life and should
therefore
 be available to everyone.
However
, universities will need to ensure that the quality of
education
 they deliver is not compromised by the growth in student numbers.
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